Posted by rosy on September 17, 2003 at 00:29:17:
In Reply to: Re: 12387 posted by Aprill Ann on July 30, 2003 at 20:35:05:
: I agree, Jeremy! I think, as an English major, this bothers me most when participating. I know it's part of it... but it reminds me too much of the realities of teaching school. And I see the same words over and over again; without grammar I'm on auto pilot.
: : This is an example of the beginnings of a good poem, but the system needs some mutations so evolution can "tweak" the words. For example, a mutation that inserted the word "an" before 'overlooked' would make the poem more sensible; also changing 'ringing' to 'rings'--the core of good words is there and they strike a nerve, but the grammar isn't quite right.
: : : into the soullessness
: : : ringing overlooked simplistic life
That's really sad guys, don't take grammar too seriously!
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