Posted by Jeremy on July 30, 2003 at 14:04:01:
In Reply to: 12387 posted by another one on July 29, 2003 at 07:22:35:
This is an example of the beginnings of a good poem, but the system needs some mutations so evolution can "tweak" the words. For example, a mutation that inserted the word "an" before 'overlooked' would make the poem more sensible; also changing 'ringing' to 'rings'--the core of good words is there and they strike a nerve, but the grammar isn't quite right.
: into the soullessness
: ringing overlooked simplistic life